Waterfall Pool

Peggy Rice

The water flows from deep in the woods, rivulets into streams.

The water flows as streams, over rocks.

The water flows over rocks and

w a te r

c a sc a d e s

ov er

roc ks

a n d

down
rocks

and

down

down

into a

large deep pool
of icy cold water.
I wade slowly
from the edge
of the pool and
my toes are ice cubes
my legs are chilled
then my waist and
my chest and
the water is so cold
I dive under
quickly before
I change
my mind and
when I surface
I gasp for air
but none will come because
my lungs are frozen.

 

Writing201 Poetry: cold (topic), concrete poem (poetic form), anaphora/epistrophe (literary device)

4 thoughts on “Waterfall Pool”

  1. Alexander October 15, 2015 / 12:22 pm

    This is really fantastic, I got your concept straight away and I really felt the way water flows.

    Liked by 1 person

    Reply
  2. Annie October 15, 2015 / 1:33 am

    I love how you put it such that I could feel myself getting down, down, down… with the icy cold water!

    Liked by 1 person

    Reply

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